“Plastic surgeries: a way to become more beautiful, or someone’s unhealthy idea” - Essay Score 10/10
Beauty is sometimes seen as internal positivity towards oneself and others, and it is also considered to be aesthetic in the outward appearance of people, places, and things. The ancient Greeks displayed their view of beauty in classical sculpture, and later on in history, 16th century artists were commissioned to depict the grandeur and light of beauty in paintings. Now in the present, the idea of beauty continues to be expressed differently. Does it stem within us or outside of us? Can we create it for ourselves? In one extreme, plastic surgery has been a means for self-expression, a way to add onto an individual’s view of beauty, and in the other extreme, it has the ability to either elevate or lower their own self-esteem.
Just like make-up, piercings, and tattoos, plastic surgery is a means for self-expression. The most popular notion of plastic surgery is that it is used to enhance appearance. Celebrities are always adjusting their bodies, whether it may be their noses, wrinkles, or removing body fat. These are all procedures in cosmetic surgery, and they are mostly recreational. If anyone feels like they have to dress or smell a certain way, they do it for themselves. The same occurs with plastic surgery. It is a choice that stems from self-image.
Plastic surgery elevates the self-esteem of whoever decides to do it for themselves, but it can also lower it. After plastic surgery, celebrities appear happier about their desired outcome. The same occurs for burn victims who get plastic surgery. Even then, plastic surgery is not always perfect, and the undesired outcome can create low self-esteem and health problems. There are risks like hematoma, nerve damage and numbness, infection, deep vein thrombosis and pulmonary embolism, and scarring. It is also suggested to know the doctor’s credentials and investigate the facility where the procedure will take place in order to reduce the risk of complications.
So, in a way, plastic surgery adds onto beauty. It is a means for self-expression and it can elevate or lower an individual’s self-esteem, but it has risks as well as positive outcomes.
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